FANDOM


Corrections

List of errors found throughout the fanfiction. We use leadvone.com as a reference point and British English. Besides that it is always best to use standard grammar rules. If it's a title or proper noun, then capitalise — otherwise, lowercase. The only exception is when talking about the Gray, Light, and Dark when referring to factions.

Templates for copy paste Edit

Nay small Aye small

General Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
mind scape, mind-scape mindscape needs to be consistent. Replace All for all documents suggested
defiantly definitely Common malaprop: Review each usage of either of these two words. In this case, auto-correction is not your friend!
brake break Common malaprop: Review each usage of either of these two words. In this case, auto-correction is not your friend!
fiend friend Common malaprop: Review each usage of either of these two words. In this case, auto-correction is not your friend!
bare bear Correct examples: bare her soul, bear her depression, bare naked, barely there, bearing a great weight, barely conscious
breath breathe Correct examples: short of breath, need to breathe
31
39
41
dream scape, dream-scape dreamscape needs to be consistent. Replace All for all documents suggested
41
42
Slytherin house Slytherin House needs to be consistent. Replace All for all documents suggested
1
4
5
7
13
15
17
22
31
33
35
40
41
muggle world Muggle World Discussed on stream
wizarding world Wizarding World Discussed on stream
third floor corridor third-floor corridor Needs hyphen

Book 1 Edit

Chapter 1 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 1
He also knew the Headmaster He also knew the headmaster might be intended Aye small
doesn't make sense…. He knew  doesn't make sense… He knew  only three dots Nay small
indication with his interactions with Voldemort indication from his interactions with Voldemort Aye small
we're going to bend our self imposed rules. we're going to bend our self-imposed rules. Aye small
"How did he die in the first time-line?" "How did he die in the first timeline?" Aye small
I'd have to play a zero sum game I'd have to play a zero-sum game Aye small
by claiming the tile by claiming the title Aye small
prophecy to who ever I please, prophecy to whomever I please, Aye small
with different story telling forms and tools with different storytelling forms and tools Nay small
no apologies for head related injuries. no apologies for head-related injuries. Nay small
in the far corner of a high security in the far corner of a high-security Aye small
and revulsion on his parents faces and revulsion on his parents' faces Aye small
a bored sounding voice a bored-sounding voice Aye small
A four word sentence A four-word sentence Aye small
deliberately choose John to be deliberately chose John to be past tense Aye small
We already let John re-do the We already let John redo the Aye small
"In the grave-yard at the end "In the graveyard at the end Aye small
how he got such good grades without trying how he got such good marks without trying Aye small
Do not try to setup master Do not try to set up master separate words as a verb, setup or set-up as a noun, Aye small
not a deathly hollows style gift. not a Deathly Hallows-style gift. in-universe proper noun (also spelling and hyphen) Aye small
falling into he same trap falling into the same trap Aye small
showed itself to be the curled up, skin and bones form showed itself to be the curled-up skin-and-bones form 3 hyphens added and 1 comma taken away Aye small
James Potter, the True-Boy-Who-Lived James Potter, the true Boy-Who-Lived also hyphen removed Aye small
On the plus side, there were fewer dementors around, but on the negative side On the plus side, there were fewer dementors around, but on the minus side It’s either plus/minus or positive/negative that are the contrasts, not plus/negative or positive/minus. Aye small
was believed by all to be The-Boy-Who-Lived was believed by all to be the Boy-Who-Lived also hyphen removed Aye small
When the chamber of secrets had When the Chamber of Secrets had Aye small
In his two years at Hogwarts he'd never In his two years at Hogwarts, he'd never Nay small
The look of disgust and revulsion The looks of disgust and revulsion Aye small
but it was the only thing to do and, as messed up as it sounded, but it was the only thing to do, and, as messed up as it sounded, Aye small
and Harry Potter, The-True-Boy-Who-Lived, walked and Harry Potter, the true Boy-Who-Lived, walked also 2 hyphens removed Aye small
t was the veil of death t was the Veil of Death Aye small
moving towards the veil leaving Harry moving towards the Veil, leaving Harry Aye small
He was halfway to the veil He was halfway to the Veil Aye small
Harry finally replied again, "Err… who are Harry finally replied again, "Er… who are sfu: Not sure about it Nay small
side of the small room to him, side of the small room from him, Aye small
he motioned to the woman who inclined her head to Harry, "we have a bone to pick he motioned to the woman, who inclined her head to Harry. "We have a bone to pick Aye small
Death seemed personable enough, "does this bone have Death seemed personable enough. "Does this bone have Aye small
If we hadn't have done that, If we hadn't done that, Aye small
Harry’s looked nonplussed. "But… It's not my fault if I was a damn horcrux! Harry looked bewildered. "But… it's not my fault if I was a damn horcrux!" I suggest using a different word than nonplussed, as it was used just a few paragraphs before. Maybe bewildered? Aye small
seless sack of wizard that called himself The-Boy-Who-Lived failed useless sack of wizard that called himself the Boy-Who-Lived failed hyphen removed Aye small
So, Dumbledore told John… That made sense. So, Dumbledore told John… that made sense. Aye small
two Dark Lords in his life, both of which two Dark Lords in his life, both of whom Aye small
towards the twinkly-eyed towards the twinkly eyed “Twinkly” is an adverb, and adverbs do not require hyphens in these cases. They naturally modify adjectives, so the hyphen does not bring any clarity to the sentence. Nay small
he was no longer able to manipulate events and your brother he was no longer able to manipulate events. Your brother
  1. Previously was a run-on sentence.
Aye small
other flimsy trumped up charge?" other flimsy trumped-up charge?" Aye small
his horrific personality, he had a four year lead his horrific personality. He had a four-year lead Aye small
"…" "…" Delete entirely, both instances. I suspect LVE wanted to use it to indicate Harry was thinking, but it is unnecessary and just adds confusion to the chapter. Aye small
"Wait… That's why he let "Wait… that's why he let Aye small
give him a third chance! give him a third chance!” quotation missing Aye small
who also thinks they are our chosen. who also thinks he is our chosen. Nay small
that opened the chamber." that opened the Chamber." Aye small
against Dumbledore you need against Dumbledore, you need Aye small
"No no no, Harry. "No, no, no, Harry. two commas added Aye small
political elite…"—Harry stretched his chin—"…On political elite…." Harry scratched his chin. "…On delete em dash Aye small
Any death eaters or allies Any Death Eaters or allies Aye small
for allies—A moment of silence passed—Slytherin or allies.” A moment of silence passed. “S delete em dash Aye small
"Well done young champion "Well done, young champion Aye small
"That's as well as maybe "That's as well as may be Aye small
let house rivalries detract you let house rivalries distract you Aye small
to bring to your side. to bring to your side." quotation missing Aye small
team building exercises. team-building exercises. Aye small
as a pile of rags and bones can. as a pile of rags and bones could. Aye small
Death spoke up. "Mister Potter Death spoke up, "Mister Potter Nay small
Fate interjected, "so long as Fate interjected. "So long as Aye small
you have a free pass.” quotation missing Aye small
back through the veil. back through the Veil. Aye small
an edited highlights reel an edited highlight reel Remove "s" Aye small
Fate's ice blue eyes Fate's ice-blue eyes Hyphen Aye small
"… But wouldn't that "…But wouldn't that Remove space after leading ellipses Aye small
the final hundred odd years the final hundred-odd years Hyphen Aye small

Chapter 2 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 2 Aye small
"Um… Yew? "Um… yew? not sure Aye small
It's the oldest Yew in the It's the oldest yew in the should be small Aye small
absolute right of the King to rule absolute right of the king to rule not sure Aye small
Oh… He might also have spotted Oh… he might also have spotted not sure Aye small
and aggressive with her question monologue, and aggressive with her questions monologue, not sure Nay small
of alerting Dumbledore to his presence. of alerting Dumbledore of his presence. not sure Nay small
While Diagon alley looked While Diagon Alley looked spelled wrong, source Aye small
If old man only knew. If the old man only knew. word missing? Aye small
a tiny lighting bolt killing a tiny lightning bolt killing spelled wrong Aye small
it would give him early warning it would give him an early warning spelled wrong?
"Err… Thank you, "Err… thank you, not sure Aye small
and happiness in the back of Harry's cornea. and happiness across Harry’s retinas.’ Or possibly ‘... back of Harry’s eyes’ the cornea is just the part at the very front of the eye Aye small
the comforts of the tearoom in practise the comforts of the tearoom in practice noun Aye small
They were no-where to be seen They were nowhere to be seen Aye small
the glossy paged brochure the glossy-paged brochure Aye small
"Oh no… oh shit! shit!"Oh no… oh shit! Shit!New sentence Aye small
"What if someone uses them! Oh shit! shit!"What if someone uses them! Oh shit! Shit! Aye small
some less deserving cut purse some less deserving cutpurse Aye small
07 Great British Pounds 07 Pounds Sterling (without Great British) British language use Aye small
thestral herd in the British isles thestral herd in the British Isles Aye small
a hint of smile played across a hint of a smile played across Aye small
As his finger tips wrapped As his fingertips wrapped Aye small
and aggressive with her question monologue, and aggressive with her questioning monologue, Nay small
Chapter two: Chapter Two: Nay small
To do that he needed To do that, he needed Nay small
if you were helpless everything you were helpless, everything Nay small
not the imperius, nothing could not the imperius; nothing could Aye small
the imperius — you just had the imperius—you just had space removal Nay small
unforgivable — poor little unforgivable—poor little space removal Nay small
wand wielding weakling wand-wielding weakling Aye small
OWL in defence stumbled OWL in defence who stumbled Nay small
muggle repelling wards muggle-repelling wards Aye small
charms — as he charms—as he space removal Nay small
sell him a wand, he was too young sell him a wand; he was too young Aye small
be any good — they'd be any good—they'd space removal Nay small
If he were caught he'd be in If he were caught, he'd be in Nay small
length as the elder wand. length as the Elder Wand. Aye small
was a short plump woman was a short, plump woman Aye small
Yes, it is, where are you parents dear? Yes, it is. Where are your parents, dear? 4 things Aye small
future-heartbreaker future heartbreaker no hyphen Aye small
Well dear. Why don't you Well, dear, why don't you 3 things. 2 commas and one lower case Aye small
"Thank you Mrs…?" "Ruthson dear." "Thank you, Mrs…?" "Ruthson, dear." 2 commas Aye small
and Dad now — they're and Dad now—they're space removal Aye small
Not to worry dear, Not to worry, dear, Aye small
holiday filled holiday-filled Aye small
don't panic, its probably don't panic; it's probably two things: semicolon and apostrophe Aye small
shit! shit!." shit! shit!" Extra period removed Aye small
less deserving cut purse less-deserving cutpurse two things :) Aye small
smiled… Breakfast time. smiled… breakfast time. Aye small
his intended — The Ankerwycke his intended target—The Ankerwycke two things: word missing and space removal
and included passages and contained passages twice included back to back, so instead contained Aye small
king Henry VIII, had started king Henry VIII had started comma deletion Aye small
and England, and the and England and the comma deletion
over him — something over him—something space removal
with an audible, "phew." with an audible, "Phew." Aye small
'Fight-or-flight' 'fight-or-flight' Aye small
All in all it could have All in all, it could have Aye small
who — because of their who—because of their space removal Aye small
apparate — should apparate—should space removal Aye small
It was small and crept It was small, and crept comma Aye small
to tombstone, as though to tombstone as though no comma Aye small
chest was bare — the shirt chest was bare—the shirt space removal Aye small
You can see me right? You can see me, right? comma Aye small
you're magical aren't you? you're magical, aren't you? comma Aye small
both silly and aggressive with her question monologue The list has this on it twice. First, it adds an S to the word question... ...That is incorrect and reads awkwardly. I see it also corrected to “questioning” later in the list, and that is much better
and, 'your sight,' …are you a and, 'my sight,' …are you a Aye small
young man," a hint of smile young man." A hint of a smile 3 things. dot and two a's Aye small
she smiled, "my name is she smiled. "My name is two things Aye small
single branch of the Llangernyw Yew, to make a single wand single branch of the Llangernyw Yew, to make a single wand too many singles
How do you, a child, want to defeat him? This sentence just reads oddly. The reader thinks it ought to go something like “How can you, a child, hope to defeat him?”... ...But that’s not what it says. She asks why he’d want to defeat Voldy, since he’s a child. If that’s what you’re going for, leave as is. Otherwise, consider revising
child of prophecy — singled child of prophecy—singled space removal
herself — to do the herself—to do the space removal
Please Harry, take what yo Please, Harry, take what yo comma Aye small
Before you go… can I see Before you go… may I see Angelystor uses old language, thus may Aye small
lightning bolt shaped lightning bolt-shaped Aye small
Hogwarts — a place Hogwarts—a place space removal
who cared, was tiny. who cared was tiny. no comma Aye small
bristling with muggle repelling bristling with muggle-repelling Aye small
architecture — row after row architecture—row after row
square, curved, sloping roofs square, curved sloping roofs Delete second comma and how can something be squared and curved :P Aye small
of one building of course. of one building, of course. comma Aye small
a melting roman temple a melting Roman temple Aye small
unwound his make-shift unwound his makeshift Aye small
past the guards, up into past the guards up into no comma
250 pounds — the results 250 pounds—the results space removal
English accented child English-accented child Aye small
Merlin he loved goblins Merlin, he loved goblins Aye small
was looking for — a small was looking for—a small space removal
And next to the counter, And finally, next to the counter,
a black, full-length, duster style thestral shell cordovan coat with a robe style hood. a full-length black thestral shell cordovan duster with a robe-style hood huge revision. read carefully Aye small
"Can I help, Sir?" "Can I help, sir?" Aye small
Ah, well done, Sir. Ah, well done, sir. Aye small
strands — in a wand core Ten strands—in a wand-core braid. removal and hyphen Aye small
on the mannequin." on the mannequin. unneeded quotation mark Aye small
a smoke filled orb a smoke-filled orb Aye small
it, eh, Young Man?" it, eh, young man?" Aye small
muggle made wand muggle-made wand Aye small
Err… Thank you, Erthank you, Aye small
Err” is a word that means a mistake or miscalculation, such as “err on the side of caution,” while “er” is the sound one makes when thinking or when stumped. That is why I am changing all these Err’s to Er’s. Aye small
and other mind altering magics and other mind-altering magics Hyphen Aye small
"Yeah, Baby?" "Yeah, baby?" Lowercase Aye small
to conclude I was a very short to conclude he was a very short Change to third-person POV Aye small
I suppose it might be He supposed it might be Change to third-person POV Aye small
of polyjuice… okay, so there were of polyjuice… Okay, so there were A complete sentence after ellipses should be capitalized Aye small
Why…why can't my sight Why… why can't my sight Space after ellipses Aye small
through emerald green eyes through emerald-green eyes Hyphen Aye small
Well, Fair Lady, this is where Well, fair lady, this is where Lowercase Aye small
"Yes, My Lady?" "Yes, my lady?" Lowercase Aye small
a fierce lightning bolt shaped scar a fierce lightning-bolt-shaped scar Two hyphens Aye small
Thank you, Mrs. Ruthson. Thank you, Mrs Ruthson. Remove period Aye small
Oh, yes, Mrs. Ruthson Oh, yes, Mrs Ruthson Remove period Aye small
It was Mr. Ollivander It was Mr Ollivander Remove period Aye small
"I know you're there!" Mr. Ollivander called "I know you're there!" Mr Ollivander called Remove period Aye small
in this tiny welsh village in this tiny Welsh village Capitalize Aye small
The man was silent few a few moments The man was silent for a few moments Typo Aye small
sending emerald green sparks up sending emerald-green sparks up Hyphen Aye small
but something had defiantly changed but something had definitely changed Not sure Aye small
and the world beyond the veil and the world beyond the Veil Capitalize? Aye small
would risk the almost certain destruction would risk the almost-certain destruction Hyphen Aye small

Chapter 3 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 3
loopholes or unthought of problems. loopholes or unthought-of problems.
but decided wasn't worth it but decided it wasn't worth it
he wanted it be on his terms. he wanted it to be on his terms.
digging himself a passage way digging himself a passageway
Filling the space of the entrance of the passage at or beyond to avoid the double 'of'
It was now mid September It was now mid-September
stealing other high value items stealing other high-value items
Hell, they taught thirteen year-olds Hell, they taught thirteen-year-olds
Harry wasn't there any more Harry wasn't there anymore
a random fire ball a random fireball
detail with pin point accuracy. detail with pinpoint accuracy.
reaching down into a desk draw reaching down into a desk drawer
It was now mid October and It was now mid-October and
multi compartment, shrinkable multi-compartment, shrinkable
for early to mid November for early to mid-November
He was working to a schedule He was working on a schedule
No really?, but he shoved No really? But he shoved
"Fidelius Occultum!" "Fidelius occultum!"
The crystal blue waters The crystal-blue waters Hyphen
'the organisation of high-level drug markets' 'The organisation of high-level drug markets' Capitalize
breaking the international statute of secrecy breaking the International Statute of Secrecy Capitalize
and muggle baiting laws and muggle-baiting laws Hyphen
the bog standard normal high street the bog-standard normal high-street muggle bank Two hyphens
he shook his head He shook his head Capitalize
and a sheet metal roof and a sheet-metal roof Hyphen
Around the wall edges, Various machines Around the wall edges, various machines Lowercase
questionable states of repair, Metal barrels questionable states of repair. Metal barrels Change to period
in the middle, crouched three men in the middle crouched three men Remove comma
the wizard detection ward the wizard-detection ward Hyphen
and muggle repelling wards and muggle-repelling wards Hyphen
his brand new, powerful as hell wand his brand-new, powerful-as-hell wand Three hyphens
head with midnight blue scales head with midnight-blue scales Hyphen
A mother fucking dragon A motherfucking dragon Should be one word
No really?, but he No really?', but he Add closing quote
the wand waving work the wand-waving work Hyphen
yew focus had never meant to be yew focus was never meant to be Typo
The eyes were gray The eyes were grey Typo
the posh looking tosser the posh-looking tosser Hyphen
other high magic areas other high-magic areas Hyphen
contact him in future contact him in the future Missing word
processed into medical grade morphine processed into medical-grade morphine Hyphen
leading to two hollowed out rooms leading to two hollowed-out rooms Hyphen
its soon to be hoard of treasure its soon-to-be hoard of treasure Two hyphens
he started, "What's your business then he started, "what's your business then Alternatively, change comma to period
Mr. Lawless's men had been shocked Mr Lawless's men had been shocked Remove period
$Hey! Winged Serpent! §Hey! Winged Serpent! 0167 ascii
I mean you no harm!$" I mean you no harm!§

Chapter 4 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 4
hidden in it's shadow. hidden in its shadow.
as a blow-him-away wind shredded his fog. as a blow-you-away wind shredded his fog.
got my ass handed to me got my arse handed to me Lord Greengrass would think ass = donkey
ill pass to the conquer of ill pass to the conqueror of
where upon I'd be rolled out whereupon I'd be rolled out
A small girl with weasley-red A small girl with Weasley-red
to shore up the rag tag alliance to shore up the ragtag alliance
by a Dark sided wizard by a Dark-sided wizard
being humoured less then thirty being humoured less than thirty
just completely over powered him just completely overpowered him
me by an eight year old me by an eight-year-old
and blood related within and blood-related within
'face my destiny,' where upon 'face my destiny,' whereupon
and chatting to his Lady Greengrass. and chatting with his Lady Greengrass.
Jacob stared after the man who Jacob stared at the man who
candidate for heir to the Slytherin candidate for an heir to the Slytherin
had died on the end of had died at the end of
with the ascendancy to the with the ascendancy of the
was blown away with a miniature was blown away by a miniature
in the middle of room in the middle of the room
Shall we retire to somewhere more Shall we retire somewhere more
morphed themselves to his new form morphed themselves into his new form
anger flowing into him. anger flowing through him.
the much worshiped Boy-Who-Lived the much worshipped Boy-Who-Lived British English
"Greengrass manor!" "Greengrass Manor!"
Noble house of Greengrass, was looking Noble House of Greengrass, was looking
born on the July thirty-first born on the thirty-first of July 31st of July as an alternative
"To be decided upon later no doubt? "To be decided upon later, no doubt? comma
the much worshiped Boy-Who- the much worshipped Boy-Who-
weasley-red hair Weasley-red hair
up the rag tag alliance up the rag-tag alliance
The neutrals, as we seem The Neutrals, as we seem Capitalize
items of dubious legality." items of dubious legality?" Change to question mark
There is nothing we trade in that is not legal There is nothing we trade that is not legal Remove "in"
conversation with Lord Potter, Dear? conversation with Lord Potter, dear? Lowercase
and if his memory and, if his memory Comma
in a less than light section in a less-than-light section Two hyphens
he looked at the ring He looked at the ring Capitalize
One the one hand On the one hand Typo
Weasley on his arm, stayed his hand Weasley on his arm stayed his hand Remove comma
who John had grown to love whom John had grown to love Typo
The neutrals are losing The Neutrals are losing Capitalize
non pureblood noble houses non-pureblood noble houses Hyphen
A stun, shield-breaker, stun combo A stunner, shield-breaker, stunner combo Add "er" endings
a banish, shield breaker, stun combo a banisher, shield-breaker, stunner combo Add "er" endings, and add hyphen
Jacob said."Shall we retire Jacob said. "Shall we retire Space
the comfy living room sofa the comfy living-room sofa Hyphen
a long lost descendant a long-lost descendant Hyphen
The so called loopholes you speak of The so-called loopholes you speak of Hyphen
the much worshiped Boy-Who-Lived the much-worshipped boy-who-lived Typo, hyphen, and lowercase
the look on The-Fake-Boy-Who-Lived's the look on the fake boy-who-lived's Lowercase, and remove two hyphens
You're the brother of the Boy-Who-Lived You're the brother of the boy-who-lived Lowercase
John Potter isn't the Boy-Who-Lived John Potter isn't the boy-who-lived Lowercase
John isn't the true Boy-Who-Lived John isn't the true boy-who-lived Lowercase
Merlin returns from beyond the veil Merlin returns from beyond the Veil Capitalize
found himself face to face found himself face-to-face Two hyphens
Standard European Duelling Rules Standard European duelling rules Not sure
Standard? How about Extended Class B? Standard? How about Extended Class B? According to chapter 55/stream
Very well, Extended Class B Rules. Very well, Extended Class B rules. According to chapter 55/stream

Chapter 5 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 5
an over whelming sense of déjà vu an overwhelming sense of déjà vu
being caught in a bare faced lie being caught in a bare-faced lie
were looking at him, at though were looking at him, as though
"Its okay, Harry. You "It's okay, Harry. You
silence filing the hall silence filling the hall
red faced, heart leaping red-faced, heart leaping
I'm a bit better then that. I'm a bit better than that.
She looked over the boy. She looked over at the boy.
Daphne was on a buzz high. Daphne was on a buzzing high.
We've still got a ways to go We've still got ways to go
had this conversation, Okay?" had this conversation, okay?"
the other wizard's had been the other wizards had been
take the swearing in oath take the swearing-in oath
Noble house of Slytherin, a small amount Noble House of Slytherin, a small amount
As Lord Slytherin, the head of said Most Ancient and Noble house, As Lord Slytherin, the head of said Most Ancient and Noble House,
after grim, the god of war after Grim, the god of war
sitting in the manor foyer sitting in the manor's foyer
She stilled. “Where I live? She froze. “Where I live?
other manors of the ancient and noble houses other manors of the Ancient and Noble Houses
Her calves, thighs, and butt were on fire. Her calves, thighs, and butt felt like they were on fire. not sure abt this one, just well, they aren’t actually on fire, idk.
standing in a huddle around one of the seats, and, with a politician's instincts for standing in a huddle around one of the seats, and with a politician's instincts for remove second comma
let fate have her way let Fate have her way
grew as rumours flew among them. grew as rumours flew amongst them.
Some voices were raised, some looked horrified makes it sound like the voices looked horrified
Could they with the required ring, please come Could they, with the required ring, please come comma
She’d been sat here for hours She’d been sitting there for hours
lightning-bolt shaped scar lightning-bolt-shaped scar Two hyphens
seating himself with a loud Whumpf seating himself with a loud 'whumpf' Lowercase, and add quotes
ever side along apparated ever side-along apparated Hyphen
controlled by the Albion family magics controlled by the Albion Family Magics Capitalize
establishment of the Albion family magics establishment of the Albion Family Magics Capitalize
But…something didn't feel right But… something didn't feel right Space
elegant, blond-haired witch elegant, blonde-haired witch Typo
both present and future? both present and future?" Add closing quote
A thousand years ago "A thousand years ago Add opening quote
In recent years, it has become "In recent years, it has become Add opening quote
None has suffered from None have suffered from Typo
Those traditions are, ambition "Those traditions are ambition Add opening quote, and remove comma
Those that prove themselves "Those that prove themselves Add opening quote
Ever since Merlin forged "Ever since Merlin forged Add opening quote
forged the Albion family magics forged the Albion Family Magics Capitalize
The Hogwarts houses are unique "The Hogwarts houses are unique Add opening quote
As Lord Slytherin, the head "As Lord Slytherin, the head Add opening quote
Who here doesn't fight for their family. "Who here doesn't fight for their family? Add opening quote, and change to question mark
over to our children. over to our children? Change to question mark
Thank you." "Thank you." Add opening quote
little blond in her arms little blonde in her arms Typo
rifling through draws rifling through drawers

Typo

Typo
very ornate looking parchment very ornate-looking parchment Hyphen
a large, comfy looking garden chair a large, comfy-looking garden chair Hyphen
but its still nice, don't you think but it's still nice, don't you think Apostrophe
through the halls of Greengrass manor through the halls of Greengrass Manor Capitalize
Dumbledore slid the elder wand Dumbledore slid the Elder Wand Capitalize
grip on the elder wand grip on the Elder Wand Capitalize

Chapter 6 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 6
"Harry's math skills are beyond A-level level." "Harry's maths skills are beyond A-level."
Her eye's flickered, Her eyes flickered,
drew out a text-book of his own. drew out a textbook of his own.
than the snails pace her than the snail's pace her
Your Mum suggested twice a week Your mum suggested twice a week
magic in their every day lives magic in their everyday lives
magics exist specificity to stop magics exist specifically to stop
to cram a lifetimes worth of to cram a lifetime's worth of
She felt she'd just been received a just received or just been given
through her all-night had been through her all night had been
"No. I'm okay. Its just…" "No. I'm okay. It's just…"
came from the trap door came from the trapdoor
who dealt in rules and logic. who dealt with rules and logic.
he'd think she were insane. he'd think she was insane.
and looked around the trunk that and looked at the trunk that
Mrs. Granger continued, Mrs Granger continued, Mrs. is American, Mrs British
Her eye's flickeered Her eye flickered OR Her eyes flickered
she asked. Not quite believing she asked, not quite believing punctuation and capitalization
bottle of acid green liquid bottle of acid-green liquid Hyphen
'The History of the International Statute of Secrecy,' The History of the International Statute of Secrecy, Remove unnecessary quotes
by hard altering the rune stones by hand-altering the rune stones Typo and hyphen
No-one's ever managed it No one's ever managed it Remove hyphen
the snake-decorated chocker the snake-decorated choker Typo
his over-six-foot-frame his over-six-foot frame Remove one hyphen
putting on an emerald green mask putting on an emerald-green mask Hyphen
I…I can't possibly betray I… I can't possibly betray Space
I may have over prepared you I may have overprepared you Should be one word
with long blond hair with long blonde hair Typo
wearing his emerald green mask Harry, wearing his emerald-green mask Hyphen

Chapter 7 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 7
the shape of lightning bolt. of a lightning bolt
they did all that too you they did all that to you
to open the chamber of secrets to open the Chamber of Secrets in-universe proper noun
week from tonight at mid-night week from tonight at midnight
and those who posses the secret and those who possess the secret
and he'd asked it back. and he'd asked for it back.
and to a lesser extant and to a lesser extent
non noble halfbloods non-noble halfbloods
If feels amazing. It feels amazing.
a final disgust filled glare. a final disgust-filled glare.
Pinky of your right hand Little finger of your right hand British English
slipped the ring on her pinky slipped the ring on her little finger British English
by the sad looking by the sad-looking
couldn't take this any more, she couldn't take this anymore, she
he couldn't take any more, calmness he couldn't take anymore, calmness
mention such a practise mention such a practice
you don't need it any more." you don't need it anymore."
just outweighing fear of getting just outweighing the fear of getting
She was still dreaming? Was she still dreaming?
difficult to continuing liking difficult continuing liking OR difficult to continue liking
A younger looking Mrs. Potter A younger looking Mrs Potter British English
Mrs. Potter reached Mrs Potter reached
Why did Mrs. Potter have two Why did Mrs Potter have two
"Professor!" Mrs. Potter cried "Professor!" Mrs Potter cried
A quick check in with Mrs. Weasley A quick check in with Mrs Weasley
"Yah." "Yeah."
and kicked up of the damp floor and kicked up of the damp ground
Hi Ginny. Hi, Ginny. comma
Ambitious aren't we? Ambitious, aren't we?
"MMmmmhmmm," he hummed "Mmmmmhmmm," he hummed Lowercase
the cruellest looking man the cruellest-looking man Hyphen
an inflamed lightning bolt shaped scar an inflamed lightning-bolt-shaped scar Two hyphens
the ministry of magic atrium the Ministry of Magic atrium Capitalize
a brown haired witch a brown-haired witch Hyphen
an enflamed lightning bolt scar an inflamed lightning-bolt scar Typo and hyphen
an eerie looking archway an eerie-looking archway Hyphen
drowning out all other thought drowning out all other thoughts Typo?
I'm going to stop it."

"I…I…"

I'm going to stop it."

"I… I…"

Space
the secret, — i.e. you — can use it the secret—i.e. you—can use it Remove spaces and comma
a man in the middle attack a man-in-the-middle attack Three hyphens
looked like a nimbus 1700 looked like a Nimbus 1700 Capitalize
several bluebell flame lanterns several bluebell-flame lanterns Hyphen
"Muggle repelling wards," he said "Muggle-repelling wards," he said Hyphen
with a lightning bolt pendant with a lightning-bolt pendant Hyphen
Harry knew what he was doing…right? Harry knew what he was doing… right? Space
A quick check in with Mrs. Weasley A quick check-in with Mrs. Weasley Hyphen
felt it seep into her finger tips felt it seep into her fingertips Should be one word
a small lightning bolt design on the face a small lightning-bolt design on the face Hyphen
a high end piece of jewellery a high-end piece of jewellery Hyphen
trying to re-create the noble-house rings trying to recreate the noble-house rings Should be one word
his best-mate's little sister his best mate's little sister Remove hyphen
A younger looking Mrs Potter walked in A younger-looking Mrs Potter walked in Hyphen
a second, identical looking toddler a second, identical-looking toddler Hyphen
halfbloods half-bloods Hyphen
"Yes, yes." Harry said "Yes, yes," Harry said Change to comma
Boy-Who-Lived boy-who-lived Many occurences

Chapter 8 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 8
"Nah. Give it a half-hour. Let her "Nah. Give it half an hour. Let her British English
drab looking London town houses, drab-looking London town houses,
the buildings were gray the buildings were grey
before he'd started to chow down before he'd started to tuck in ‘chow down’ is extremely uncommon in British English, but ‘tuck in’ is very common
window-shopping the quidditch store window-shopping at the quidditch store
corners. Its wearer was owner or bearer people wear hairstyles, but they don’t wear their hair
an ornate dinning table an ornate dining table
to keep your father knowing you're here to keep your father from knowing you're here
just to get good grades in school just to get good marks in school nobody uses grades in British English
without the subject's knowing. without the subject's knowledge.
of drab looking London town houses, of drab looking London townhouses,
to start duelling practise to start duelling practice noun with c, verb with s
his shoulder length blond hair his shoulder-length blond hair
from the old London town house from the old London townhouse
its important to get it back it's important to get it back
Or cuts off you hand?" Or cuts off your hand?"
headquarters of most innovative headquarters of the most innovative
foot-shaped impressions in the ground, foot-shaped impressions on the ground,
[January, 1990 (Two [January 1990 (Two no comma
looking into the silvery-gray looking into the silvery-grey
Kuh. It wasn't easy getting Pfft. It wasn't easy getting The audio version by Soren sounds like a snort here
considered the top-floor-office considered the top-floor office Remove last hyphen
were a light-sided family were a Light-sided family Capitalize
away from The Quibbler Building away from the Quibbler building Lowercase
recast his rain repelling charm recast his rain-repelling charm Hyphen
to give him near perfect eye-sight to give him near-perfect eyesight Add hyphen, and "eyesight" is one word
muggle repelling wards muggle-repelling wards Hyphen
everything short of fidelius everything short of the fidelius Missing word
littered the rookery's garden littered the Rookery's garden Capitalize
eating an ice cream eating ice cream Remove "an"
turning to leave." turning to leave. Remove extraneous quote
a low chance event a low-chance event Hyphen
treated like a guess-my-name-puzzle treated like a guess-my-name puzzle Remove last hyphen
"Yes, my Lord Slytherin." Before dashing out of the room. "Yes, my Lord Slytherin," she said, before dashing out of the room. Fix sentence fragment
You never met Harry's great-uncle did you. You never met Harry's great-uncle, did you? Add comma and question mark
from a four-week-trip from a four-week trip Remove last hyphen
returning her focus to her Betrothed returning her focus to her betrothed Lowercase
A Nargle just appeared by your head A nargle just appeared by your head Lowercase
flying beetle that hunts Nargles flying beetle that hunts nargles Lowercase
a super duper secret a super-duper secret Hyphen
He raised his orange juice to mouth-level He raised his orange juice to mouth level Remove hyphen
his friendship with the Lovegood Heiress his friendship with the Lovegood heiress Lowercase
she's the Black Heiress she's the Black heiress Lowercase
The Black Heiress spluttered The Black heiress spluttered Lowercase

Chapter 9 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 9
sisters, one born a half-hour after the sisters, one born half an hour after the British English
and was now a half-hour older than the and was now half an hour older than the British English
along the riverbank for a half-hour, and along the riverbank for half an hour, and British English
the most sought after artefacts the most sought-after artefacts
The great accounting we call it. The Great Accounting we call it. (in-universe proper noun)
two and a-half years ago two-and-a-half years ago
stories of axe wielding debt stories of axe-wielding debt
at fixed times through-out at fixed times throughout
and into a well appointed waiting and into a well-appointed waiting
crisis in the Goblin nation. crisis in the Goblin Nation.
before any age related decision before any age-related decision
in a large see through box by in a large see-through box by
curse took a lot of practise, curse took a lot of practice,
waiting for the throw back. waiting for the throwback.
red and white smoke stack, red and white smokestack,
as already half way into as already halfway into
and give him draught of living and give him a draught of living
solution made it all the more easy. solution made it all the easier.
not yet here was a snowy. not yet here was a snowy one.
pushed it through a banister, pushed it through a bannister, British English
cloak of liquid cloth spilled out. cloak of liquid cloth spilt out.
Like I said, I like the interesting ones." As I said, I like the interesting ones."
Kuh. An elegant flower that opens just as the snow and ice starts melting.  Gah. An elegant flower that opens just as the snow and ice starts melting.  Not sure about the word kuh...
jam spread toast jam-spread toast Hyphen
each having only twenty percent. each having only twenty percent." Add closing quote
a family vault for The Most Ancient a family vault for the Most Ancient Lowercase
uses to determine age. uses to determine age." Add closing quote
a medium sized snake a medium-sized snake Hyphen
two large tuffs of white two large tufts of white Typo
"How about Free-key?" "How about Freekey?" Remove hyphen
the gaze of death himself the gaze of Death himself Capitalize
and razor sharp talons and razor-sharp talons Hyphen
they record him entering the Manor they record him entering the manor Lowercase
The soon-to-be first-years morphed The soon-to-be first years morphed Remove hyphen
crisis in the Goblin nation crisis in the goblin nation Lowercase

Chapter 10 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 10
A half-hour later, Harry hovered Half an hour later, Harry hovered British English
being heard, nor smelt being heard, nor smelled smelled also works.
from a half foot away. from a few inches away nobody says from half foot
with a fine shine of gore. with a fine sheen of gore. not sure
She collapsed to the ground." She collapsed to the ground. quotation marks not needed
lightning-bolt ring on her right pinky. lightning-bolt ring on her right little finger.
He bolted onto the grand staircase and He bolted into the grand staircase and not sure
lowered their lances, baring his path lowered their lances, barring his path
of the spiders with an over powered of the spiders with an overpowered
That would just be confunding." That would just be confounding." not sure
Half way up, she caught sight Halfway up, she caught sight
Lord Slughorn was a key-stone Lord Slughorn was a keystone
We'll now take a twenty minute unscheduled We'll now take a twenty-minute unscheduled
He leapt though the opening. He leapt through the opening.
and anywhere we could carries and anywhere we could, carries
wizard, with a full gray beard. wizard, with a full grey beard.
The grand warlock The Chief Warlock Source
looking for it is still possible looking for, it is still possible Comma
he'd fully entered the area-wards he'd fully entered the area wards Remove hyphen
bag of bertie bott's every flavour beans bag of Bertie Bott's Every Flavour Beans Capitalize
a sweets only buffet a sweets-only buffet Hyphen
whatever you do…Do. Not. whatever you do… Do. Not. Space
a shower of spider bits. Decorating the a shower of spider bits, decorating the Change to comma
a re-run of what they tried a rerun of what they tried Should be one word
establishment of the Albion family magics establishment of the Albion Family Magics Capitalize
not a house-elf not a house elf Remove hyphen
in an emerald green mask in an emerald-green mask Hyphen
his dead skin-cells his dead skin cells Remove hyphen
a point blank killing curse a point-blank killing curse Hyphen
gave a loud Cawwww gave a loud 'cawwww' Lowercase, and add quotes
the Headmaster jumped in the headmaster jumped in Lowercase
Is all this cloak and dagger nonsense Is all this cloak-and-dagger nonsense Two hyphens
his tiny flying-with-Ginny-broomstick his tiny flying-with-Ginny broomstick Remove last hyphen
a super secret Hogwarts scouting mission a super-secret Hogwarts scouting mission Hyphen
The neutrals now called themselves The Neutrals now called themselves Capitalize
he passed the fourth floor landing he passed the fourth-floor landing Hyphen
Duelling practise time, Daphne Duelling practice time, Daphne Noun form

Chapter 11 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 11
over the red head's shoulder, over the redhead's shoulder,
Where did you run away too? Where did you run away to?
John arrived in the dinning room John arrived in the dining room
"That's right, Son." Glad to see you taking your body seriously, now. "That's right, Son. Glad to see you taking your body seriously, now." quotation mark wrong place
Can I talk you about it? Can I talk to you about it?
a small lean stake, a small lean steak,
Half way through demolishing Halfway through demolishing
had one in the last time-line had one in the last timeline
He father looked over his copy His father looked over his copy
The ink and parchment was rife The ink and parchment were rife
I was about to head into the office. I was about to head in to the office.
Wha? Wha-? hyphen
"Stu-Pi-"—Her mouth glowed red—"-Fy!" "Stu-Pe-"—Her mouth glowed red—"-Fy!" Incantation is Stupefy, not stupify
The redhead blanked. Then collapsed The redhead blanked, then collapsed Change to comma
"Oh, Poo." "Oh, poo." Lowercase
You sure you don't want back-up You sure you don't want backup Should be one word
He's going to wake-up into a situation He's going to wake up in a situation Remove hyphen, and change "into" to "in"
in high emotion situations in high-emotion situations Hyphen
jeans and t-shirt jeans and a t-shirt Missing word
we need anything… from…what we need anything… from… what Space
don't have well paying jobs don't have well-paying jobs Hyphen
his bedroom in Potter manor his bedroom in Potter Manor Capitalize
None of it had happened — The stone None of it had happened — the stone Lowercase
his death — None of it his death — none of it Lowercase
branded a liar — a cheat — the very opposite branded a liar—a cheat—the very opposite Remove spaces
He'd have to careful of course He'd have to be careful of course Missing word
breakfast appeared — A plate of breakfast appeared — a plate of Lowercase
"Happy birthday, Darling." "Happy birthday, darling." Lowercase
Excuse me… I…I'll be right back Excuse me… I… I'll be right back Space
washes and re-sizing charms washes and resizing charms Should be one word
no way that Ginny Weasley— poor no way that Ginny Weasley—poor Remove space
Weasley— could possibly afford Weasley—could possibly Remove space
Not that- that would stop him Not that that would stop him Remove comma (maybe change second "that" to "it")
He got a control of himself He got control of himself Remove "a"
wearing full auror uniform wearing his full auror uniform Missing word. Alternatively, change to "in full auror uniform"?
He brought out the hair-clip He brought out the hair clip Remove hyphen
can be shrunk and used as a hair-clip can be shrunk and used as a hair clip Remove hyphen
Ginny who he loved Ginny whom he loved Typo
wake in just a few days time wake in just a few days' time Apostrophe
award for most-frustrating-Slytherin award for most frustrating Slytherin Remove hyphens
chamber/chamber of secrets Chamber/Chamber of Secrets Multiple occurrences

Chapter 12 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 12
kitchen and dinning room. kitchen and dining room.
Perhaps a friend of one your friends Perhaps a friend of one of your friends
time to meet any one? time to meet anyone?
Do you have a boy friend? Do you have a boyfriend?
John climbed The Burrow stairs John climbed the Burrow's stairs
She struggled on her bindings She struggled against her bindings
no-longer bound, but still no longer bound, but still
The twin's heads peeped around The twins' heads peeped around
and gave duel, theatrical bows and gave dual, theatrical bows
with lots of extraneous hand waving." with lots of extraneous hand waving. quotation marks not needed
like to formerly invite you like to formally invite you
the ring on her pinky. the ring on her little finger.
into her right pinky into her right little finger
She collapsed side-ways on the bed She collapsed sideways on the bed
The second-hand moved. The second hand moved.
Ancient and Noble house of Potter Ancient and Noble House of Potter
out of The Burrow next year out of the Burrow next year
vibrations on his right pinky. vibrations on his little finger.
The grin vanished. Oh, Damn. The grin vanished. Oh, damn. Or: Oh. Damn.
stroll to the leaky cauldron. stroll to the Leaky Cauldron.
He arrived in Ottery St. Catchpole He arrived in Ottery St Catchpole
cloak, and a poly-juice. cloak, and a polyjuice.
never actually used poly-juice never actually used polyjuice
Making a split decision Making a split-second decision and may want to change the ‘second’ later in the sentence to avoid repetition
—Dragons can wait. Family comes first. dragons can wait. Family comes first.
"Yes, It's me, but "Yes, it's me, but
grabbed the silver lighting-bolt grabbed the silver lightning-bolt
His skin scrapped off His skin scraped off
"Holy Shit!" "Holy shit!"
he shot off duel stunners he shot off dual stunners
the second young-man hit the second young man hit
he'd escaped The Burrow, he'd escaped the Burrow,
echoing off the inferi-filled cave walls. echoing off the inferi-filled cave's walls. as it is, it implies the cave walls are filled with inferi
directly into The Burrow's own directly into the Burrow's own
the lack of wand, the lack of a wand,
or while at the Dursleys or while at the Dursleys'
formally known as Snowy formerly known as Snowy
voice called though the fruit voice called through the fruit
that is not a hair pin that is not a hairpin
Do you have a boy friend? Do you have a boyfriend?
than in the last time-line than in the last timeline
only been a fourteen year-old only been a fourteen-year-old
could get the time-line back could get the timeline back
She collapsed side-ways on She collapsed sideways on
contained a back-up stash contained a backup stash
and two years of prison and two years in prison
A steel voice rang around the kitchen A steel voice rang through the kitchen
than first time around. than the first time around.
at down adjacent to Mrs. Tonks at down adjacent to Mrs Tonks
Mrs. Tonks raised an Mrs Tonks raised an
all the other Mr. Mrs. cases in the chapter with Mr and Mrs
Noble house of Potter. John is my Noble House of Potter. John is my
Her father re-directed her Her father redirected her Should be one word
You said you did used to like John You said you used to like John Remove "did"
a foul smelling bucket a foul-smelling bucket Hyphen
Ginny has a fully built mind-scape Ginny has a fully built mindscape Should be one word
And mind-scapes are advanced. And mindscapes are advanced. Should be one word
cleaning and re-cleaning pots cleaning and recleaning pots Should be one word
Ginny could build a mind-scape Ginny could build a mindscape Should be one word
no enchantments, no mind-magics no enchantments, no mind magics Remove hyphen
vulnerable to mind-magics vulnerable to mind magics Remove hyphen
retreat into her mind-scape retreat into her mindscape Should be one word
by mind raping her by mind-raping her Hyphen
the evil, dark-wizard corrupting the evil, dark wizard corrupting Remove hyphen
giving you a heads up giving you a heads-up Hyphen
His Dumbledore orchestrated introduction His Dumbledore-orchestrated introduction Hyphen
acting like blood traitor scum acting like blood-traitor scum Hyphen
"You…you're Dark?" "You… you're Dark?" Space
one of pure contempt." one of pure contempt. Remove extraneous quote
Harry, Let it out Harry, let it out Lowercase
his world re-aligned itself his world realigned itself Should be one word
suck at holding a re-sizing charm suck at holding a resizing charm Should be one word
meet her ice blue one meet her ice-blue one Hyphen
than last time around — sharper, more aware — and while than last time around—sharper, more aware—and while Remove spaces around em-dashes
The Boy-Who-Lived has a brother The boy-who-lived has a brother Lowercase
heard that the Boy-Who-Lived heard that the boy-who-lived Lowercase
He was suddenly face to face He was suddenly face-to-face Two hyphens

Chapter 13 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 13
Mum! Dad! We're going to be late! And you now know goblins don't like to be kept waiting. "Mum! Dad! We're going to be late! And you now know goblins don't like to be kept waiting." quotation marks missing
sign here and the house of Granger sign here and the House of Granger
deal with 'their kind.' half-blood deal with 'their kind,' half-blood comma
decapitated mess a coins toss away decapitated mess a coin's toss away
He pushed a filled out form He pushed a filled in form (British English)
contained a lot more legalise contained a lot more legalese
she was loathed to take off she was loath to take off
she arrived outside Madam Malkins Robes she arrived outside Madam Malkin's Robes
Oh, Damn. Not pureblood. Oh, damn. Not pureblood.
many of it's own customs many of its own customs
spelled out to new comers. spelled out to newcomers.
in her parent's back garden. in her parents' back garden.
lesser-known schools in the British Isles. lesser-known schools in Britain.
wand makers use different combination of wand cores wand makers use different combinations of wand cores
I had the brother wand to Voldemort I had the brother wand to Voldemort's
caster that looses the subsequent caster that loses the subsequent
It's not common wand law. It's not common wand lore.
for most of her parent's books for most of her parents' books
She leant in to him, She leant into him,
around with the awe struck countenance around with the awestruck countenance
said a middle aged witch said a middle-aged witch
hair so light is was almost blond. hair so light it was almost blond.
spelled out to new comers." spelled out to newcomers."
Obviously other wand makers use Obviously other wandmakers use
He held up his fifteen inch yew He held up his fifteen-inch yew
owing to their ability to be re-born from owing to their ability to be reborn from
known to wizard kind, known to wizardkind,
The wand maker handed her The wandmaker handed her
feel his excitement pressed against her, feel his excitement pressing against her,
The wizarding world uses dragon in The wizarding world uses dragons in
just point out that of course they'd love just point out that of course, they'd love
of them aren't well spelled out of them aren't well spelt out
And you now know goblins don't like And you know goblins don't like Remove "now"
Tottenham Court Road. Tottenham Court Road." Add closing quote
like any self respecting intellectually curious person like any self-respecting intellectually curious person Hyphen
sat back down on the living room sofa sat back down on the living-room sofa Hyphen
a very enthusiastic attempt none the less a very enthusiastic attempt nonetheless Should be one word
the Albion family magics the Albion Family Magics Capitalize
sacrificed into a purpose made runic chalice sacrificed into a purpose-made runic chalice Hyphen
the long lost squib line the long-lost squib line Hyphen
Both she, and her parents Both she and her parents Remove comma
He pushed a filled out form He pushed a filled-out form Hyphen
before re-colouring itself gold before recolouring itself gold Should be one word
parcel of land in the grounds parcel of land on the grounds Typo
build a medium sized country house build a medium-sized country house Hyphen
her Mum and Dad now wore, drew power her Mum and Dad now wore drew power Remove comma
"Hello, Dearie," said a middle "Hello, dearie," said a middle Lowercase
wearing brand new casual robes wearing brand-new casual robes Hyphen
a powerful magical knock-back a powerful magical knockback Should be one word
that looses the subsequent battle of wills that loses the subsequent battle of wills Typo
the mountain they were born on. the mountain they were born on." Add closing quote
many different unicorn hairs many different unicorns' hairs Add "s" and apostrophe
I'm Hermione Granger, Sir I'm Hermione Granger, sir Lowercase
"Yes, Sir." Her tone conveyed "Yes, sir." Her tone conveyed Lowercase
a plain looking wand." a plain-looking wand. Hyphen, and remove extraneous end quote
This year's batch have been This year's batch has been Typo
really quite interesting… Mmmm really quite interesting… mmmm Lowercase
a few pure white sparks a few pure-white sparks Hyphen
A fountain of pure white sparks A fountain of pure-white sparks Hyphen
Really, Sir? I would have thought Really, sir? I would have thought Lowercase
It can't be that rare, Sir It can't be that rare, sir Lowercase
"Thank you, Sir." She turned to leave "Thank you, sir." She turned to leave Lowercase
paid in mountain high stacks paid in mountain-high stacks Hyphen
a figure hugging, form fitting, curve showing, dress a figure-hugging, form-fitting, curve-showing, dress Hyphens
Working age members of House Granger Working-age members of House Granger Hyphen
After another half-hour After another half an hour British
it had been the Greengrass Heiress it had been the Greengrass heiress Lowercase

Chapter 14 Edit

Wrong Corrected Reasoning Status
Chapter 14
book and slid it from its brother's snug embrace. book and slid it from its brothers' snug embrace.
didn't smile back and her smile faulted. didn't smile back and her smile faltered.
"That was Okay? Wasn't it?" "That was okay? Wasn't it?"
We have enumerable treasures We have innumerable treasures
of course, and Susan, It'll be of course, and Susan. It'll be should be a dot
Alex couldn't help notice that John Alex couldn't help but notice that John word missing
toy of the Black's broke toy of the Blacks broke
What were left were the high What was left were the high
held it close to like a shield held it close like a shield ( or ‘close to her’)
clarinets, moulding into trumpets, clarinets, melding into trumpets,
feeling was were the similarities ended. feeling was where the similarities ended.
If her grand father was correct If her grandfather was correct
melted lead it's focus was so intense. melted lead its focus was so intense.
Did the box just Meow? Did the box just meow?
she grinned a marauders grin she grinned a marauder's grin
good sniff as padfoot, good sniff as Padfoot,
It's from my lord. It's from my lord." quotation mark missing
declaration, less he put your son declaration, lest he put your son
even more insane then them even more insane than them
if she'd a bit less headstrong if she'd been a bit less headstrong
about the Hogwarts express? about the Hogwarts Express? in-universe proper noun
table where to grown-ups sat. table where the grown-ups sat.
eyes to see Luna's gray ones eyes to see Luna's grey ones
and plied them off, and prised them off,
takes a decade of practise takes a decade of practice noun
It is now more obvious then It is now more obvious than
he's in his mid twenties he's in his mid-twenties
her own box shaped her own box-shaped
intro to a fifty-some year old intro to a fifty-some-year-old
was a half blood was a halfblood
Alexandra face palmed, again. Alexandra facepalmed, again.
John stopped half way through John stopped halfway through
The first born children The firstborn children
ready for the tell tale tickling ready for the telltale tickling
in another minute long hug. in another minute-long hug.
a bookmark into the same page a bookmark on the same page
heard you're still top of class, heard you're still top in class, ‘Top in class’ has more a feeling of ‘great job, you’re doing well’

‘Top of class’ feels a little bit more ‘you are superior to those lesser plebs’

It's Sirius referring to Alex. He does not feel like someone bragging in that position

a large grin forming over his face. a large grin forming on his face.
and she felt the girl wrap around her, wrapping or wrapped not sure
it's the only way isn't it? it's the only way, isn't it? comma
come down wearing a gray dress if she'd come down wearing a grey dress if she'd
her with her silvery gray stare. her with her silvery grey stare.
first generation magicals to the international statue of secrecy first generation magicals to the international statute of secrecy typo
a medium length black beard a medium-length black beard Hyphen
Good morning, Grand Father Good morning, Grandfather Should be one word
But... but, sharing with But but, sharing with Change three periods to ellipses
a glass of half-drunk fire whisky a glass of half-drunk firewhisky Should be one word
His dozen odd letters His dozen-odd letters Hyphen
Oh, Yes. He's very handsome Oh, yes. He's very handsome Lowercase
the blood ward protected pudding the blood-ward-protected pudding Two hyphens
the cutest pure black kitten the cutest pure-black kitten Hyphen
You're most welcome, Heiress Black. You're most welcome, Heiress Black." Add closing quote
"Hey Alex. Happy Birthday!" "Hey Alex. Happy birthday!" Lowercase
isn't really from me. She held up isn't really from me." She held up Add closing quote
sized gift. It's from my lord. sized gift. "It's from my lord. Add opening quote
Luna towards the black library Luna towards the Black Library Capitalize
Lord Slytherin was a half blood Lord Slytherin was a half-blood Hyphen
courtship jewellery… something. courtship jewellery… something." Add closing quote
happy birthday, lead by Lady Potter happy birthday, led by Lady Potter Typo
family is going to ostracised family is going to be ostracised Missing word
Mmmhmm.. And guess Mmmhmm And guess Replace two periods with ellipses
"… You don't mean?" "…You don't mean?" Remove space
"… I suppose." "…I suppose." Remove space
The adult's eyes widened The adults' eyes widened Move apostrophe
with her silvery gray stare with her silvery-grey stare Hyphen, and typo in "grey"
Shhhh…Alex, there's nothing Shhhh… Alex, there's nothing Space
with shoulder length red hair with shoulder-length red hair Hyphen
the high quality survivors the high-quality survivors Hyphen
The red haired girl stood The red-haired girl stood Hyphen
past eccentric, and into full on insane past eccentric, and into full-on insane Hyphen
posed by first generation magicals posed by first-generation magicals Hyphen
super secret motivational technique super-secret motivational technique Hyphen
and greeted the Potter Heir and greeted the Potter heir Lowercase

Site Navigation Edit

v ]
Miscellanoeus
Omake · Podcasts · References and Inspiration · Corrections · Theories
Community content is available under CC-BY-SA unless otherwise noted.